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Ten Mistakes Writers Make

Pat Holt, former Book Review Critic for the San Francisco Chronicle,  has a good piece on his Web site titled, Ten Mistakes Writers Don't See (But Can Easily Fix When They Do).  Many of the tips apply to authors writing fiction, such as tips on describing scenes and recommended use of dialog.  But there are numerous good tips for non-fiction writers as well.

One of the ones I identified with was Mistake #1, Repeats:

Just about every writer unconsciously leans on a "crutch" word. Hillary Clinton's repeated word is "eager" (can you believe it? the committee that wrote "Living History" should be ashamed). Cosmopolitan magazine editor Kate White uses "quickly" over a dozen times in "A Body To Die For." Jack Kerouac's crutch word in "On the Road" is "sad," sometimes doubly so - "sad, sad." Ann Packer's in "The Dive from Clausen's Pier" is "weird."

Crutch words are usually unremarkable. That's why they slip under editorial radar - they're not even worth repeating, but there you have it, pop, pop, pop, up they come. Readers, however, notice them, get irked by them and are eventually distracted by them, and down goes your book, never to be opened again.

I have some crutch phrases I find popping into my articles and books.  For example, I often follow potentially complex statements frought with technical jargon with a sentence starting: “That is,” followed by a simpler explanation in everyday English.  I like to pepper my writing with many examples, but have trouble finding verbage to use other than, “For example,” to start an example.  (See the second sentence in this paragraph for a prime example......)  I also seem to be fixated on starting sentences with, “Realize that...”

posted on Tuesday, January 13, 2004 10:15 PM

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# re: Ten Mistakes Writers Make 1/13/2004 11:31 PM Justin Lovell

I do not think they are "crutch" words as such that you use. The difference, I feel, is that your quoted crutch words ("sad" and "weird") are meaningless. They do not add any additional information to the sentence and that is why we find, in fictional books, that these crutch words are found at the end.

It is part of the verbage use to say "For example". The reason is this - it explains where your thought is going. There is a HUGE difference in these two sentences:

"We allow for xyz to happen for things such as abc that the user can input. For example, the user may choose to input xyz in either four ways."

"We allow for xyz to happen for things such as abc that the user can input. The user may choose to input xyz in either four ways."

To me, the writer's thoughts are crammed together. In the last passage, there is a "juttered" flow. The essentials are there but making the text sound like you are talking to the reader seems to be better suited these days.

# re: Ten Mistakes Writers Make 1/13/2004 11:32 PM Justin Lovell

One mistake in first paragraph:

They do not add any additional information to the sentence and that is why we find, in fictional books, that these crutch words are found at the end (of the sentence).

# re: Ten Mistakes Writers Make 1/14/2004 5:23 AM Maxim V. Karpov

I think technical writing is a little bit different. On the other hand, these tips are valuable. I find that writing to me is a constant process of improvement. Of course English is my second language and it presents with some challenges but good writing in any language is an art. There are a few good technical writers that I enjoy reading.

My two cents, Maxim

(www.ipattern.com do you?)

# re: Ten Mistakes Writers Make 1/14/2004 5:31 AM Scott Mitchell

Justin, you make good points but the crutch words in technical writing can get in the way too, if you don't watch it. That is, if you are using "For example" once every paragraph or so, readers may find that irritating. I'm not saying take out the "For example"s altogether, but rather use some "For example"s but also find other synonyms and complementary phrases that can be sprinkled in place of every other "For example" to bring some freshness to the text.

A tip I saw in another blog was interesting, it read: "Write non-fiction like you would write fiction, and write fiction like you would write non-fiction."

# re: Ten Mistakes Writers Make 1/15/2004 10:42 AM Rob Streno

Interesting. I just ran into this yesterday with an older book by Alan Dean Foster ("Parallelities" from 1998). He has a couple of "crutch" words that he uses throughout, but in his case they are not common words, so they caught my attention.

For example, he has two different characters (in two separate situations) use the word "convivial". All within the span of about an hour's worth of "book time". Unlikely.

-R

# re: Ten Mistakes Writers Make 1/22/2004 12:18 AM Mike Singer

> I often follow potentially complex
> statements frought with technical
> jargon with a sentence starting:
> “That is,” ...
> I also seem to be fixated on starting
> sentences with, “Realize that...”

Googling with

"Scott Mitchell" ASP "delve into" OR "delving into"

gives surprisingly fair amount of hits.

Regards,
Mike,Ukraine.

# re: Ten Mistakes Writers Make 1/22/2004 7:55 PM Scott Mitchell

Hehe, yes, Mike, I have other "crutch words" as well, it appears! :-)

It's clear my skills lie in explaining concepts in an easy to grok manner, and not in the true art of writing. Maybe this is why no one wants to read my fiction! :-)

# re: Ten Mistakes Writers Make 1/25/2004 11:42 AM Colin

Yeah, cruch words are very annoying when you tune into them. Bill Bryson, for example, uses comley far, far too often. I'd try to weed cruch words out of my own writing, but I don't know what mine are yet :(

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